Vocabulary Tip 1: Use modern, everyday vocabulary rather than archaic words and phrases.
Avoid archaic vocabulary people don’t use in speaking any more. If you wouldn’t say it, don’t write it. A short list of such vocabulary follows to give you examples. Choose the alternative to the right of each.
|as per your letter||in your letter|
|yours of the 10th||your letter of December 10|
|awaiting your reply, we are,||omit|
|in due course||today, tomorrow, next week|
|permit me to say that||omit|
|we are in receipt of||we received|
|attached herewith||here is|
|the undersigned||we, I|
|kindly advise||let us know|
|under separate cover||in another envelope|
|we wish to inform you||omit|
|enclosed please find||enclosed is|
|it has come to my attention||I have just learned|
|please be advised that||omit|
Vocabulary Tip 2: Use plain English, not what some refer to as “business vocabulary”
Use vocabulary words you might speak in ordinary conversation. Avoid slang and colloquialisms, such as “keep on truckin’,” unless you’re writing to someone you know well. However, use simpler, conversational vocabulary rather than complex words or phrases such as the following. Choose the alternatives to the right of each word or phrase.
|preceding year||last year|
|financial deficit||losing money|
|ascertain||find out, learn|
|consummate||close, bring about|
|assistance||help, converse, talk|
|we would like to ask that||please|
|for the reason that||because|
|are of the opinion||believe|
|for the purpose of||for, to|
|despite the fact that||although, though|
|in view of the fact that||because, since|
|in order to||to|
|with reference to||about|
|on the occasion of||when|
|during the course of||during|
|along the lines of||like|
|succeed in making||make|
|make use of||use|
|have need for||need|
|give consideration to||consider|
Vocabulary Tip 3: Be precise.
Tighten up the use of words.
Governmental Imprecise Wording
New Balance shoes has been in a 15-year debate with the FTC about imprecise wording. The FTC rules are that for a product to be labeled as “Made in the USA,” “all or virtually all” of the product must be made in the United States. New Balance argues that 70 percent of its shoes are made in the United States, so that fits the “virtually all” standard. It labels all of its shoes “Made in the USA.”
Precise wording would have saved taxpayers hundreds of thousands of dollars in FTC employee time and legal expenses. Perhaps they could have written, “For a product to carry the ‘Made in the USA’ label, 95 percent or more must be made in the United States.”
Vocabulary Tip 4: Avoid imprecise words
Avoid words such as “many,” “some,” “several,” and “a few.” They don’t communicate clearly. Use the exact number when you know it.
Avoid words that have vague or ambiguous meanings such as “which involve,” “in terms of,” and “that reflect.” The reader needs solid meaning on which to build understanding. This e‑mail will communicate very little:
|John needs to make changes in terms of the reports, which will involve the headings and placement of data.|
Avoid these vague words. Instead, use words that state what you mean for the reader to understand:
|John needs to change the report headings so they contain words the reader will recognize immediately. He also needs to realign the columns of data so each column fits under the report heading describing the column contents.|
Vocabulary Tip 5: Make sure the concept words you use convey your meaning precisely.
The vocabulary in this sentence is too loose:
|As many of you are aware and have participated, the agent-training team has worked with Agency Development to make training.|
The “have participated” doesn’t fit with “As many of you . . .” Also, the training team and Agency Development can’t “make” training. They can perform training or design training. The writer should tighten up the writing by rewording the statements:
|As many of you are aware and some of you know from participating in the effort, the agent-training team has worked with Agency Development to design and deliver training.|
However, the entire sentence would be shorter and easier to read if the writer simply wrote “As many of you now know, the agent-training team . . .”
Vocabulary Tip 6: Use words that describe concepts well
This paragraph uses vocabulary that does not describe the concepts or relationships among concepts:
|For an employee to be productive and innovative while developing his or her career at any professional services firm, an active participation in educational programs is crucial for long-term success. One fundamental lesson is the idea of leadership and how an understanding of leadership principles can facilitate a new employee’s immersion into a professional atmosphere.|
The writer is using words loosely. The first sentence begins with “to be productive and innovative,” explaining what an employee must do to be productive and innovative, but the sentence ends by suggesting that the comment about what the employee must do “is crucial for long-term success.” In other words, the writer applies the middle part to both the beginning and end even though they’re two different concepts.
In the second sentence, the writer calls a “lesson” an “idea.” A lesson isn’t an idea. The writer then uses “immersion,” which refers to lowering into water or deeply penetrating. That isn’t appropriate for the employee’s entrance into a professional atmosphere. He or she meant “entrance.”
The result of these imprecise uses of words is that readers become confused, the writing sounds odd, and the writer will be judged as having cloudy thinking or being unintelligent. Be as precise as you can in your use of words.
Vocabulary Tip 6: Use jargon vocabulary if the reader expects them and understands the jargon
Use jargon words only if the reader understands them. However, use jargon words for knowledgeable readers because they will expect them.
Jargon vocabulary is meaningful to readers who understand the jargon. A single word can contain a number of concepts so the jargon word communicates clearly and quickly to the reader who understands the words. Besides, the person who knows the words will expect you to use them to show you also know them and that you regard that person as knowledgeable.
However, if you have any doubts that the reader will understand the jargon, don’t use it.
Vocabulary Tip 7: Avoid business vocabulary jargon
Some commonly used business vocabulary jargon follows (adapted from Tony Proscio’s In Other Words and Bad Words for Good). Much of it should simply not be used in business writing, but if you use any of these jargon words, be sure the readers all agree with you about the meanings:
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